This is the per-viz for my Minor project that I have been working on over the summer. I set about doing this to get a better idea of now some of the shots would play out and to test out now some of the pops be shown. I am happy with some of the shot, such as the way that the Sun and Moon are introduceed, close ups that I have used for both characters, the way that Moon swings round with the crown along with the way the image fades out on the Sun at the end. I'm not too happy with some of the shots that have the characters moving around but this might be because I was focused on the walk cycle and I might not need it in my finished animation. I also think that the shot of the sun and moon spining round might have been done abit better.
Hey Rhia - congrats on getting this out: so this is my feedback re. a few simple things to tighten everything up. Right now many of your framings are clipping the Moon's head-piece or the king's crown or the tips of their fingers and so on. This should never happen in any shot and I think you need to move your camera and compositions around ensuring that your characters are always framed with such a way as everything looks much more composed, considered and purposeful. It might be for example moving the camera so we're looking slightly down or slightly up - but whatever choices you make, the framing of your characters needs to be better - with no accidental clipping. It will make such a difference to the professionalism of your camera work if you always ensure the framing of each character is always as confident as possible: I'm not talking about the 'over the shoulder' shots - because the focus is on the other character being looked at, but when you've got a character on screen by themselves, you need to ensure they are framed less scrappily - it will be worth it. In addition to this principle, I think you could add gentle 'pushes in' and 'pushes out' in terms of your camera - so when we're looking at the two characters for example, the camera tracks very gently towards them - I think you will find that keeping the camera moving softly and simply like this in your shots will add another layer of life to your film - a sense of things being in motion.
ReplyDeleteI think you need to create a bit more space at the front of your film - so start with some black or whatever, then bring up the title, and then fade up the image and then fade out the title. I feel like your film began before I was ready - and it feels a bit rushed to me...