Story Ideas - Re-write
After getting some feedback on my story idea I chose to re-write to try and develop it further. Story Idea - Re-write A young girl and her father, a light house keeper, are out fishing at sea and all seems fine. However, when they are going back to shore a storm suddenly appears and the boat hits the rocks throwing them both out in to the sea. Years later, in the present, we see that the girl has survived the accident and has now grown up. She is seen standing in front of her father’s grave showing that he didn’t survive, it is also shown that she has become a light house keeper herself to carry on his memory and to protect others from the same fate. However, the grief of her loss is still with her as she now spends all of her days and nights locked away in her light house on her own with none to talk to. However, a young man appears at her door one day and introduces himself as having moved into the old fisherman’s cottage by the shore. He tries to befriend her, ...

Just an idea, Rhia - but I think you might consider softening/desaturating slightly your facial features - to give them a greater sense of being somehow 'worn' and 'on' and 'part' of your wooden models - it feels like there shouldn't be any 'solid black' here perhaps, but rather something more in common with the colour you've got on the joints of your model? Personally, I'd be colour picking from your model for the eyes and the grey and the black just to make it all fit together.
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